Caligula's Launderette

I did a read over, and this seems like just my type of thang. So I am adding it to my list, to indepth it later. :D I love the ...

I'm not sure what catches me on this poem, I think it's the format; especially in the first stanza, it feels as if you are overloading me with information. As ...

Oh wow, Tim I think this my most favorite of anything I've seen of yours. In lieu of sounding like a gawking schoolgirl or like Imp, I will keep this ...

Firstly dear, I would like to acquaint you with my critiquing style: when I critique, I do a full analysis of the piece and go pretty indepth. So, that's that, ...

Hi, hon. I'm back for another ramble for you. I am not going to go into strict specifics or talk about the things everyone else has touched on. So here ...

Hmm... First, I noticed a few grammatical errors, mis-capitalizations, full-stops and commas missing. It disrupted the flow quite a bit, and in some places made the script very chunky. I ...

The life you love will only go as far as the bottom of the wick. - I love that idea. :D I can't walk the same paths anymore - anymore ...

Ooooh, more please! (trying not to sound like an annoying orphan named Oliver.) All hail the king! I wonder if it was just coincidence that I was listening to Flogging ...

Oh wow, smaur, that was just... there are no words... it was, tear tear *sniffle sniffle* and then the monster was like... bwahhhhhh! You are my hero. I felt so ...

Aww, this is very fluffy cute. On to the criting... 1. Get rid of the elipses. There are essentially useless here, and they make for poor structure. 2. Wordage issues, ...

So taking my crack at Wraith . I've read both chapters twice over, so I think I have more of a feel for it now (or atleast have something more ...

I'll do a more indepth critique when I have some more time. There were only a few things that caught me off guard. 1. You never mention his rank. 2. ...

Oh fudgemonkeys... I had this beautiful response and my computer just ate it. :x Let's try this all over again. If Dusky and Shadow are stealing your talent and you ...

tra la la - let's dance. So this was open for about an hour, and I think I have something coherent to say know. Have you ever read Bomb by ...

Hugs Psy! kiss poetic solitude loneliness bitterness airplanes cutting through the silent sky - If I had to pick a fav line, this would be it. The only thing that ...